First of all, I wanna show my pleasure to read your
I think there must be the followin’:
other ways instead of others ways
everywhere instead of anywhere
child’s or children instead of childs
loved instead of love
don’t have to instead of haven’t to
Concerning the last paragraph, it contains alot of mistakes
try to write it properly.
Note: we say achieving dreams not investigation dream !
Investigation done by the policemen
All the best